This post is part of Weekend Writing Warriors, the weekly hop for everyone who loves to write! You can sign up here with your name, blog and email and share an 8 to 10 sentence snippet of your writing on Sunday. Your post needs to be live between 12:00 noon on Saturday 08/19/17 and 09:00 AM on Sunday 08/20/17. Visit the other participants on the list and read, critique and comment on their 8sunday posts.
Glasgow, my love is my Nanowrimo 2017 project.
Here is the blurb:
Girl meets boy in a small café in Glasgow. The story could go anywhere from here… and it does. The novel explores the various possible futures the pair has after the meeting. Will they see each other again? If yes, will it deliver them or will it derail their life even more?
Saturated with Biffy Clyro songs and theories about the multiverse, Glasgow, My Love is a strangely magical but realist novel.
And here is a snippet about the coffee house meeting:
He stands there politely, doesn’t move before your permission. You open your mouth to say “yes, sure” but words fall to sounds in your head and you’re afraid that you would only groan. You press your lips together into a smile and you nod.
“Huh, I thought you’d send me away,” he says, his voice filled with a smile. “I’d much rather sit with you than with that suspicious old girl over there,” he adds nodding towards the woman with the fuchsia lipstick. You look at her and you would swear that she was just checking out the guy’s backside. Your eyes widen. Oh my gosh, I hope I won’t end up like this, you think, and your tight smile bubbles into a laughter.
He looks at you with slightly raised eyebrows then smiles. He has a smile that could light up the night, like a curve of the milky way.
10 thoughts on “Glasgow, my love snippet #8sunday”
Ooh, that last line is just gorgeously descriptive!
Great snippet, I loved the tone from beginning to end! Very smooth, carries the reader right along…
I’m really pulled in by the POV. Very intriguing and engaging.
Intriguing idea. Good luck with NaNo!
“Like the curve of the Milky Way” – wow, I LOVE this metaphor! Beautiful! There is definitely something unique and engaging about the voice and your style – a combination of literary fiction and fantasy, which is my favorite stuff to read!
Thank you so much, Terri! It gives me motivation to continue with my story :3
2nd person POV is hard to do well. You do! Interesting snippet. I want to read more.
Great snippet, and like others I love the ‘milky way’ phrase, beautifully poetic!
I third (or fourth or fifth) the praise for the ‘curve of the milky way’ description.